Backstory: (part 2)

She knew that she could live perfectly with all the stolen money from her family, but she wanted to have an actuall job for the first time of her life and earn money with her own efforts, soon she discovered that a Coporation was hiring new personel and she got a spot inside as a secretary, her job wasn't that exciting but it was well payed and everyone was friendly around her, she enjoyed peace for a while when one day she got called to a meeting in a space factory over a planet.

The meeting was going as expected when suddenly the factory was attacked by Sansha's Nation forces, the defense forces didn't had a chance against the soldiers of the True Power faction, most of the delegates died and just when everything was lost for her, she saw in the distance a group of soldiers wearing strange armors in the middle of a fierce battle against the invaders, the deadly spray of the enemy weapons was a mere summer rain for those warriors, there was just six of them... six of them were able to stop an invading force of elite soldiers from Sansha's Nation, their armors didn't had a single scratch and Enkidu was able to smell the smoke from their heated weapons... back at home, she heared rumors about the rise of the immortal mercenaries, the so called gods of the battlefield without fear of death, she was a witness of their power and flame was ignited inside her... then one of the soldiers walked towards her and extended his hand to get her up from the ground, when she touched the metal of his armor, her destiny was sealed.

Back at her home, she studied the mistery of the mercenaries in detail, she wanted to become one of them, she used her money for information about them and finally, she managed to contact one of the soldiers that helped her out, the young man was a little bit uncomfortable with the whole situation, but Enkidu was determined, he didn't wanted to help her and he closed the door of his house several times in front of her face, but she visited his house again and again untill one day...

-Seriously... this girl *he said while making a deep sigh* she just shows up and knocks my door... waiting for me to get out, it's been a week now since this started...

The man was watching Enkidu from the screen of his tv, hearing the sounds of the knocks and the door bell from his couch.

-I can kill her easily but... her eyes, she's full of determitation isn't? *he asked to himself*

The man scratched his cheeck and he looked to the ceiling of his house, then he made another deep sigh.

-Good grief...

After saying that, he stood up an walked to the door, then he opened it.

-Alright, I'm starting to get tired of this... but I know that you're not going to give up, damn, it's like that you have a crush on me or something.

After hearing that, Enkidu Blushed.

-You... you idiot! I'm not here because I like you, don't get the wrong idea! I'm here because I want to be a mercenary!

She was angry, but the man smiled, then he opened his door.

-Alright, let's talk.



-Part 3 comming soon-

Love your character's bio and story, however, your description's a bit lengthy and I don't know.... Keep it though, It's not gibberish and I feel like this is a good story, just... one more part so we don't have to hunt everything down.

Hehe, sorry Demel. I won't continue with that here, don't worry.

It KINDA is a bio...of sorts. Things like names and background are a guarded secret though , so this would be as close to a bio as I would write.

Thanks! I'll be sure to work on the third part soon, then I'll merge all the parts in a single googledoc, I'm pretty impressed that someone actually liked the bio of my character... just a heads up, don't pay attention to some typos and other mistakes, it's a bit hard for me to write a full story in english.

Short version because the normal version probably can't fit in one post (There's a reason why he is the way he is):
Graduated top of his class at the Federation Navy Academy, named one of the best tacticians to leave the school. After 2 years of working with the FDU, he was recruited by the Black Eagles (G-FDU Black Ops division. Espionage, sabotage, and assassination).

Got captured on a big job, was locked up for about a month, with 0 human interaction.*

Went 'insane', but a special type of insane. He seems completely sane 99% of the time, but everything he does, he does without reason. Every single move he makes, every person he kills, SEEMS smart enough that he's completely mentally stable, but in reality, he kills because he can. Part of it is his hyper-intelligence, the other part is just plain crazy. Part of this crazy compelled him to do some f*cked up things, such as being intentionally captured by a Caldari battleship, cutting the power remotely, and then killing off each and every one of them, for no reason. For every person he killed, he sent a file to the Caldari State's database, telling them when, where, and how he murdered them. This file also included name, age, and where the soldier's family lived.

Is now a Gallente criminal. Separate from any other pirating groups, but twice as dangerous. Every person that's sent to assassinate him is held back. He's smart enough to manipulate even the most dangerous assassins, to point the gun at their own head, mostly by showing them what he sees, and what he knows.

*Now, to explain what ZERO human interaction means. If you were to go a month without ANY physical interaction (With anything but the ground and air around you), you wouldn't last 4 days. On the 4th day, your mind is begging, DEMANDING that you find some kind of human, or lifeform, or anything really, that will keep you company. On the 5th day, your mind is struggling to maintain sanity, even making fake relationships with inanimate objects to satisfy the need for any type of lifeform. On the 6th, your mind starts to create a universe. This is exactly what Art did. He wasn't in there for 6 days, he was in there for 30. Not only did he have time to start the creation of a world around him, he had enough time to complete one. In his version of sanity, the Federation sent him there to kill him. A suicide mission. The Federation is an evil political super-power, hiding itself behind the mask of freedom and justice. This is why he fights the Federation. To end their "tyranic" rule.

TL;DR, Don't f*ck with Art, because he's crazy enough to slit your throat without a thought.

What he looks like: https://lh5.googleusercontent.com/-TGL2VyMTD-E/UnRGvsTKLqI/AAAAAAAAACk/rAq6sCY5PI8/Xavier%252520Sorraine%252520-%252520Profile
My EVE alt is pretty much Art, pre-criminal status.

Short version because the normal version probably can't fit in one post (There's a reason why he is the way he is):
Graduated top of his class at the Federation Navy Academy, named one of the best tacticians to leave the school. After 2 years of working with the FDU, he was recruited by the Black Eagles (G-FDU Black Ops division. Espionage, sabotage, and assassination).

Got captured on a big job, was locked up for about a month, with 0 human interaction.*

Went 'insane', but a special type of insane. He seems completely sane 99% of the time, but everything he does, he does without reason. Every single move he makes, every person he kills, SEEMS smart enough that he's completely mentally stable, but in reality, he kills because he can. Part of it is his hyper-intelligence, the other part is just plain crazy. Part of this crazy compelled him to do some f*cked up things, such as being intentionally captured by a Caldari battleship, cutting the power remotely, and then killing off each and every one of them, for no reason. For every person he killed, he sent a file to the Caldari State's database, telling them when, where, and how he murdered them. This file also included name, age, and where the soldier's family lived.

Is now a Gallente criminal. Separate from any other pirating groups, but twice as dangerous. Every person that's sent to assassinate him is held back. He's smart enough to manipulate even the most dangerous assassins, to point the gun at their own head, mostly by showing them what he sees, and what he knows.

*Now, to explain what ZERO human interaction means. If you were to go a month without ANY physical interaction (With anything but the ground and air around you), you wouldn't last 4 days. On the 4th day, your mind is begging, DEMANDING that you find some kind of human, or lifeform, or anything really, that will keep you company. On the 5th day, your mind is struggling to maintain sanity, even making fake relationships with inanimate objects to satisfy the need for any type of lifeform. On the 6th, your mind starts to create a universe. This is exactly what Art did. He wasn't in there for 6 days, he was in there for 30. Not only did he have time to start the creation of a world around him, he had enough time to complete one. In his version of sanity, the Federation sent him there to kill him. A suicide mission. The Federation is an evil political super-power, hiding itself behind the mask of freedom and justice. This is why he fights the Federation. To end their "tyranic" rule.

TL;DR, Don't f*ck with Art, because he's crazy enough to slit your throat without a thought.

What he looks like: https://lh5.googleusercontent.com/-TGL2VyMTD-E/UnRGvsTKLqI/AAAAAAAAACk/rAq6sCY5PI8/Xavier%252520Sorraine%252520-%252520Profile
My EVE alt is pretty much Art, pre-criminal status.

Lol my drug addict character went through months of something similar......but vastly worse I would say in some respects. I don't like the idea of mental scars defining the character though I would give your guys some flaws to make him a more gritty and realistic part of new eden.

Now that this is in fiction, I can post. This is what I would consider a top-down view of Galm from the point of view of CONCORD. Yet despite the fact that he claims to be an open book, I think it is safe to say that there are still certain aspects of Galm that alludes even CONCORD eyes.

Nice bio....one prickish thing to say......am I to assume...because I'm doing so now....that there was indeed an involuntary wipe by a Gallentean shadow corporation? You were kind of specific about that.

You have a very stable and respectable bio, you aren't shy about your alignment to the Gallente, you have a well formed back story which makes your character applicable and worthy of immortality, and you have some pretty detailed character designs.... only thing I would suggest, and I find this simply is just a popular character archetype....

Avoid trying to make your character an Amnesiac or the find oneself plot line.... its typically predictable and rather unfulfilling to RP to say the least. Your character is more likeable and more enjoyable to RP with when she knows where she has been, people can ask questions and you can answer.

I really like this character right now.

about the involuntary mind wipe i just added it to give a bit of mystery to the cause of the mind wipe i would have put other possible causes but couldn't think of any, and i want the reader to make their own decision as to the cause of the mind wipe i just wanted to throw a few idea's in there

i'm thinking about adding a plot line gradually which will lead to her getting disillusioned which will lead to her tragic fall from grace, but my aim to let the reader interpret certain things by giving them multiple idea's of how it happened and stuff

Can I borrow that template, Fae?

Before interview
First name: zevro
Last name: Ravenwing
Known allias: Saber, Zer0
Known affliations: BurgrezzE.T.F
Occupations: Mercenary
Home world: uknown
Parents: unkown
Scars: uknown
Hair color: unknown
Eye color: unknown
Faith: uknown

After interveiw
Name: Zevro
Known aliases: Saber, Zer0,Raven, A12.
Known affliations: BurgrezzE.T.F, Dead9 assassins
Occupations: Mercenary
Home world: "Sabre"
Parents:unknown
Hair color: black
Eye color: black
Faith: unknown


Subject refuses to say anything about subject's past

You know I do appreciate how hard it is to get into RP and while I respect your choice to RP however you want and in whatever way you want....... I find it hard to deal with and accept people who choose to RP the "Mysterious Background" Archetype.

And while there is nothing wrong with it, it sounds cool I guess...... its definitely not a fulfilling way to RP in my opinion. One of the joys of RP is creating and moulding that character you choose to channel and creating his story yourself. Some people choose to make their character and extention of themselves, others idealised version, other still something completely different and unique.

So I would say to you, if you would be willing to take my advice, I've done RP before, not so extensively as some others here on the forums but enough to know that yourself and other people will find the RP aspect much more enjoyable and exciting if you have a clearly defined character prior to opening so RP.

It doesn't mean you have to be an open book about your character but a rough idea of who he/she is can always be appreciated.

Not only that but I almost certainly guarantee you will like your own character more if you clearly establish your character, where they are going, what they want, what they did, why they did things.

E.G

Leithe Askarii (an alt of mine purely for RP)
Bloodline:Civre
Social Status: disassociated

Leithe is a known abuser of the stimulant drug Crystal X, has been self medicating for years after he was picked by CONCORD agents at a suspected Gurista's hide out in Lonetrek. Since then he has been in and out of State medical facilities, only surfacing to get prescriptions of anti depressants and do the occasional security work for small regional police forces.

Now if you asked Leithe about his life he would say

"You have the earn that right"

You can still play it mysterious but give your fellow RPers a little bit of info about your character with little trouble. And personally I find that the more open some RPers are with me about their basic character info the more open I am with them IC. Whereas those who have less information about them.... I am wary around.

Also I suspect you were in Dead 6 at one point from the Dead 9 Assassins comment....am I right?

EDIT- Yup I was right. Both in Knightz of the Round and Dead Six during the Lokun Listamenn days.

I recently had a huge breakthrough with Galm and uncovered some of his "hidden memories" sort of speak. (In truth I like to think he hasn't told anyone about these memories because they were honestly the worst battle he's ever fought and committed the worst things he's ever done and would rather just forget outright.)

I have his experience with Heth's purge really well planned out, but I'm not sure if I should share them now or hope I can someday find time to get there in Warrior Nine.

By the way, the next part is coming soon, like by tomorrow. It's going to be fairly short, but that is because it is a lead-in to a much larger one I am working on.

One problem Arc, clone tech has only been around for... eh, about three years. There'd be no way Arc could go on a ten year training tour after hearing about immortal soldiers.

No offense, great story though, as Adamance said, you might get some flak. I'm willing to roll with the idea, it's a nice ode to Earth and I like the idea.

Yet my only concern is it doesn't talk about who you are. Who the character you rp as is.....you told the basic of your past, but what's your description? Walking around in a dropsuit in the middle of a population dense area isn't going to look good.

IGS is a place for clones to relax or live the life of a mortal just for a second in their immortal life. So, maybe talk about what you look like, your name or aliases, personality. What makes you different from the crowd?

Nice I like the well thought out and unique Riot Police background, not to mention the pretty dark reason your character became a mercenary

thank you the bio was not such a problem but the detailed backround ooooh man I hate myself for having such a productive fantasy I hate my brain sometimes uuuggghhh.... I don't know if I should write it or not oh and about the dark reason well I thought you guys like grimdark and I give you grimdark