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Gemini 18
Villore Sec Ops
Gallente Federation
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Posted - 2014.01.10 03:03:00 -
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just so you know this one is no where near finished and is open to suggestions and will probably add more to it as i play the game and the template has been 'Borrowed' (stolen) from Galm Fae i hope this is fine with you, so all credit for the template goes to Galm Fae
Name: Record Deleted
Known aliases: Gemini 18
Known affiliations: Gallente Marines and Villore Sec Ops
Occupation: Mercenary
Height: 5' 7"
Weight: (havn't decided yet)
Hairstyle: Long Blonde hair with shaved side
Eyes: Ice Blue
Home World: Record Deleted
Race: Gallente
Blood Line: Gallente
Faith: Atheist
Overview: Gemini 18 has had her memory wiped and has been indoctrinated into being completely loyal to the Gallente Federation. Whether she has had her memories wiped by her own free will or been forced to by some shadow corporation within the Gallente Federation for some Project none can say, except those that wiped her memories. Rather than recover her past memories Gemini 18 has refused to acknowledge her pass life and its existence.
Gemini 18 has a reputation for being relatively straightforward and incredibly harsh. For example Gemini led a full frontal Assault against a Well fortified Pirate facility which made a mockery against previous attempts. All but one prisoner was summarily executed after the successful operation simply to demonstrate the price of weakness.
Gemini 18 has fanatical hatred of weakness and physical frailty which has led her to make extensive you of bionics in order for her to purge her failing of her flesh. Bitter and Paranoid Gemini 18 trust's her Gear and precious little else.
(so tell me whats you guys think and give me some pointers) |
Gemini 18
Villore Sec Ops
Gallente Federation
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Posted - 2014.01.10 03:25:00 -
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True Adamance wrote:Nice bio....one prickish thing to say......am I to assume...because I'm doing so now....that there was indeed an involuntary wipe by a Gallentean shadow corporation? You were kind of specific about that.
You have a very stable and respectable bio, you aren't shy about your alignment to the Gallente, you have a well formed back story which makes your character applicable and worthy of immortality, and you have some pretty detailed character designs.... only thing I would suggest, and I find this simply is just a popular character archetype....
Avoid trying to make your character an Amnesiac or the find oneself plot line.... its typically predictable and rather unfulfilling to RP to say the least. Your character is more likeable and more enjoyable to RP with when she knows where she has been, people can ask questions and you can answer.
I really like this character right now.
about the involuntary mind wipe i just added it to give a bit of mystery to the cause of the mind wipe i would have put other possible causes but couldn't think of any, and i want the reader to make their own decision as to the cause of the mind wipe i just wanted to throw a few idea's in there
i'm thinking about adding a plot line gradually which will lead to her getting disillusioned which will lead to her tragic fall from grace, but my aim to let the reader interpret certain things by giving them multiple idea's of how it happened and stuff |
Gemini 18
Villore Sec Ops
Gallente Federation
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Posted - 2014.01.10 12:23:00 -
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i have been thinking about connecting my two characters in some way so they can affect each other's story's my other character is Skare-Krow an Caldari whom has specialized in infiltration and Espionage, i was considering giving them two a past maybe a romantic one,
i'll try and make gemini 18 grim but not too grim and slowly become disillusioned over time and slowly become numb and a monster with no pitty or remorse |
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