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Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.14 17:55:00 -
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Because Rinas Rylos had a really good idea and now I will shamelessly steal it and adapt it. XP
You can read here.
I cannot promise evrey day posts, but I will try to make it up by writing a decent amount. |
Rinas Rylos
Hostile Acquisition Inc
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Posted - 2013.05.15 01:15:00 -
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At this point I'm going to have to start writing more just to stay ahead of the curve. :P |
Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.15 02:50:00 -
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Also Rinas, I would like your feedback on my writing (besides the awful syntax/grammar/spelling errors that I missed). |
Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.16 03:05:00 -
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Second one up! This one is a little small. Not much to talk about yet. |
Rinas Rylos
Hostile Acquisition Inc
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Posted - 2013.05.16 05:46:00 -
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I'd love to. Would you like it here, or given in a more private fashion? |
Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.16 11:39:00 -
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Here is fine. :) |
Rinas Rylos
Hostile Acquisition Inc
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Posted - 2013.05.17 07:29:00 -
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Well, I'd say you've started off on a decent pace, but that you're writing contrary to what you claim it is. My old writing teacher used to tell me that I wrote similar to how I spoke, but I'm reading a distinct lack of something similar here. The writing itself isn't too bad, but when you're done I want you to read it back to yourself and imagine if you'd talk like this while recording an audio log. Said teacher also told me that I used far too many commas, but I fear you've got the opposite problem here. :P |
Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.17 12:25:00 -
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I see. I am still trying to figure out Straum's "voice." As for the comma thing, I was never good at it. My old english teacher told me I used to many so I changed it and now it is this. Commas are a tough thing to nail down. XP |
Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.17 17:00:00 -
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Log 3 is up. |
Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
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Posted - 2013.05.18 15:19:00 -
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I put up a personal post. I think I'll punctuate my logs with personal posts every so often, as well as maybe user submitted stuff that I think is cool. |
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Straum Arjn
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
Intersellar Conquest Enterprises
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Posted - 2013.05.20 21:42:00 -
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Log 4 is up! |
Sandromin Hes
Sand Mercenary Corps Inc.
Intersellar Conquest Enterprises
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Posted - 2013.05.21 05:18:00 -
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I can write too, I just have so little ability to help.
So firstly, congratulations Straum. Just put your commas after sentence openers, and you should be fine. Also, avoid using the second person if you can. I'll put all my writing tips in this post/thread from now on. I'll also help through voice chat. See you on the field soon! |
Straum Arjn
Scholae Evocati
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Posted - 2013.06.08 02:44:00 -
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Log 5 is up! |
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