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Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.08.21 00:13:00 -
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It was a long, strange day in the mercenary quarters. Every mercenary of the grounds and space capsuleer alike rallied at the central hub. It wasn't a briefing. It was a story being set aside by one of the rulers of the ship, or perhaps the CEO of one corporation. The steel chambers of the Leviathan Toxus III were glimmered by its surrounding lights like the central lighting of the spaceship. The captain, Orpulo De Resonance ordered all his fellow crewmen of his humble pirate ship to listen to a little story portrayed in his experience... as a soldier, a fighter during his service to the Caldari State while Caldari Prime was under aflame by certain destruction on both sides.
He said, "Thank you all. Fellow mateys for heeding into my budging call! Apparently not another goose chase, but something for myself to share my story of how I got this far."
The crew of the ship seemed dazzled about what their leader is about to blurt. Instead they objected their leader's words. One of them asked, "Yeah? You're noobiness days with the State. You were hilarious back there. Especially getting shanked by a bastard knifer named 'Neon Acropolis'.
"Shut up Timothy!" He growled in embarrassment as he was made into a laughing stock.
"Yeah! Yeah! Whatever!"
After this horrendous argument broke out between the two, the captain sighed with a breath of honest relief and so instead began preaching this story of 'Acropolis' to every mercenary. It was like a bedtime story, an old Jovian Optical Record System coded by the author himself about his deadly struggle. It was scavenged by the captain Orpulo himself upon a dead Jove mothership whilst robbing it off another mining corporation. "Now shippidy-crew mates, ...."
The captain's story of this warrior immediately changed the setting of the entire central hub of the ship, as the ancient Jove technology mirrored the setting... and the lore behind the character, named Neon Acropolis... |
Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.08.21 00:58:00 -
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The slaves were angry towards their oppressors, not surprisingly I had this immortality hidden from my present nature. The slaves were armed with all means of weaponry. It stated from gold-class Amarr tech weapons to simple improvised makeshift weapons made by these tribe-skins. I was surprised that after all, these low-techs are far more adaptable than my people first believed. Right now they were pointing their weapons towards me, suddenly realized I was no Amarrian. They lost their interest in attacking me defenseless and so pressed on a newer agenda. They asked for a truce, I agreed on whatever they may take me.
The carnage outside the Imperial homeworld......(Still to be done).... |
Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.08.21 12:33:00 -
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Part 2
The slaves were angry towards their oppressors, not surprisingly I had this immortality hidden from my present nature. The slaves were armed with all means of weaponry. It stated from gold-class Amarr tech weapons to simple improvised makeshift weapons made by these tribe-skins. I was surprised that after all, these low-techs are far more adaptable than my people first believed. Right now they were pointing their weapons towards me, suddenly realized I was no Amarrian. They lost their interest in attacking me defenseless and so pressed on a newer agenda. They asked for a truce, I agreed on whatever they may take me.
The carnage outside the Imperial homeworld forced half to escape west into the cosmos, as legions of soldiers are attempting to quench the chaos. For myself, escape was the main priority, and so hijacked a nearby Templar fighter. The fighter had an ancient appearance as it was one of the first batch built by Imperial manufacturing. It was an old museum exhibit.
However, surprisingly the Jovian blood are capable of harnessing any form of technology which gave me the speculating advantage. I already knew how to fly the ship and so took me even further into the stars. It was no simple mission. The Imperial blockade stood high up the fabric of space, engaging the Minmatar Republic ships at will, and some would hinder my approach. I fled through the barriers regardless whether my ship would burst into ashes. I made it out of orbit.
The daring escape from the countless carnage uprooted many damages on the cockpit. It was on fire and myself was heavily wounded, waiting to die from excessive blood loss grunting. Suddenly, the ship began to deplete on fuel as it was very far to move further into the escape zone and eventually death gave in, or so I thought.
The next thing, though the Templar were to be out of fuel. Its transmission beacon still beeped and beeped. It was no beacon. It was an alarm heading for a collision course! BEEP AND BEEP! I woke up saw the Templar crashing down to a new planet like a fast meteor. I must be sleeping the whole time, I was panicking and eventually at least the wings of the ship are still functional despite it dented from missile damage. It was swirling and stalling at an unpredictable speed, I used the unknown prowess I had which sent the Templar on a horizontal position. It stopped as the impact left scars on the new world I first stepped into. What I saw was far more distorted and chaotic than the first war I saw.
I then saw steel ships, grey and again foreign in design at war with its rival; these green-like creations. Eventually, a twelve-hundred metre class ship was in front of me and forced me to hide beneath its entrails... (Still to come) |
Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.08.23 15:25:00 -
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Essence Of Wolfenheim
A Vengeful Spirit
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Posted - 2014.08.25 12:47:00 -
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Is that he fought for the green side of the war, not the grey. There was a huge difference when he explained all the factions at war, and introducing the galaxy we live in, New Eden. Countless days of past, we stayed on the titan's belly and investigated hidden secrets and a secret weapon. It was a body armour, customized by the high powers of the state and carried twin daggers beside it. Orion made the first approach. "Oh my god. The first prototype in the generation." He gasped like a little boy seeing things beyond his dreams. I myself, knew what technology this armour has. It's stolen, Jove tech reversed engineered by these insects in order to turn the tides of war. I felt disgraced and bashed the armour's glass frame and suited it on in the process. Orion felt angry towards me as I took the armour from him. "Neon, why did you take it? It was supposed to be the objective. No! My objective." He blew out his cover. "I give up. I already know who you are 'Acropolis.' You shouldn't have taken the armour for youself. It carried ancient power made by your people and yes the Jove. I've heard about them and saw you were a young child back there and you changed, an unforgiving and ungrateful, worthless person."
I felt suspicious behind my new best friend. At all this time, he was a spy for the Federation. A backstabbing scumbag, a parasite within State quarters and tricked in front of my eyes. In this turn, the suit gave me the privilege to make a first word coming from my lips. "I thought...."
"I thought! Said by the bastard who snatched my opportunity of absolute glory."
"Then... Then... WHY IS THIS ARMOUR IMPORTANT TO YOU ANYWAY!!" Neon shouted in regret, demanding an answer. As he glanced at his former best friend, Orion faced back at him and began to laugh hysterically."
"We, are in the verge of losing this damn war anyway. Not by factions of this present age. It is within all of us, the immortals. They will kill us all, and YOU. Are just one of them." Orion pointed his hand, jealous and aimed a bolt pistol against him. "Damn capsuleers, damn the Jove. I hate you now Acropolis, no! Neon Acropolis! You ungrateful son of a *****!"
"Enough already!" I felt enraged towards my new rival, with the rage fueling the suit and impaled Orion towards the wall. Just before he was taken to death, Orion countered his first attack with a counter jab and a roundhouse kick, tossing the inexperienced me towards the wall. I growled in pain, and felt limping as my legs starting to become unstable. Orion was merciless and deadly fighter. He knew all the moves and counters was enough to subdue me to the ground. But I kept fighting for the suffering of my people regardless. I was bleeding, bruised and broken. My bones squished and he was about to finish the poor Jovian outcast. |
Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.08.31 20:20:00 -
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"You know what?" He mindset changed to a different level. "Neon, how about I spare you? I can't leave you like this, giving you a cruel death or so. You should've just gave the armour, I mean the freaking Jove dropsuit to me anyway. I have matters to attend to, and as for this suit, I'd think I'll take that stolen technology of your feeble body first."
"Why-are-you.... Doing this??"
Orion ignored Neon's question, and suspected something in his hand. The Jove record system, bloodied by its people's blood. Golden in appearance with ancient, runic symbols of different meaning. He took it off his grasp, he demanded it back. The Gallentean laughed, and ended the recording. It suddenly immersed into a static-like screen as it flashed randomly and shut down.
End of Log.
"That's it?" The crewmen of the present age spoke after the record. "Is that the only crap could give us about this guy? What the hell?"
"Sorry hearties, that is all what I scavenged."
"Bullshit captain. Tell us where you found this mothership. We're going to find the truth about this Acropolis, and I'll find the rest of these Jovian archives."
"I-I... don't know now... The mothership, where it is (Still to come). |
True Adamance
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares
Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
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Posted - 2014.08.31 22:58:00 -
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I don't mean to nit pick but "Glory to the Slaver, death to the weak" Is not a tenet of the Amarr Faith, it has no scripture to back it up, nor does it fit in to the operations of the modern Empire.
"We were commanded us to burn the system...We did. I mourn the loss of the innocent caught in our fires" -Kador Ouryon
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Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.09.01 14:02:00 -
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Thanks for the information.
"It's Neon's point of view. I'm just here to write, not to boast or argue about your faithfulness Amarrian. I'm just a traveller. A courier to the State." - Aria |
Nrabatar Zorig
Nos Nothi
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Posted - 2014.09.01 21:33:00 -
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Aria Acropolis wrote:Thanks for the information.
It's Neon's point of view in the story. Haven't you heard, the word 'Log'? Point of views are different from the true reason. And Neon just entered the Amarrian homeworld, still unaware of his new golden surroundings before the Minmatar Revolution/Rebellion. And this section is for writing a story, not replies for those who argue.
I'm just here to write, not to boast or argue about your Imperial Devotion. The section is called D 514 Fiction, not happy Amarr day. I'm just a traveller in the site, exploring things anew. No hate mate, just here to write Neon Acropolis' story.
I just have to cut in here and say that you're taking this the wrong way. Adamance isn't trying to boast about the Amarr or argue about it just for the sake of it, he's doing it because that's how it is in the lore. I know this place is called DUST 514 Fiction and certain liberties can be taken with story elements, but the thing is, DUST 514 and EVE Online has a rich and expansive lore, ignoring it would be a disservice to it and make writing fiction about it moot.
When writing fiction here, people prefer them to be as true to the lore as possible, and if there are inconsistencies, people will point it out and correct you on it. If you don't like that and prefer to keep doing it your own way, that's all good and okay. Just don't claim it to be a troll invasion and abandon the entire thread to create a new one because one person posted some critique.
And a little bit of advise, if you don't want other people commenting on your thread while it is still in the works, don't write the entire thing here. Use an external website or program like Google Drive and paste the links here. You can add and edit it as much as you like and the thread is freed up for comments about your stories, everyone benefits.
Shaman Zorig of the Vherokior Tribe
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Aria Acropolis
Ikomari-Onu Enforcement
Caldari State
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Posted - 2014.09.03 15:40:00 -
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