Denak Kalamari
Intaki Liberation Front
Intaki Prosperity Initiative
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Posted - 2014.03.22 19:57:00 -
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baniel bj wrote:Why wont u ****off scurb.
. dont commit on my post then if u dont like it
I'm expressing my opinion on your motivational speech from a neutral standpoint(I'm intaki, with my own indipendent agenda of the Gallente), and I found it lackluster and not really performing its job as you intended it to be based on the things I pointed out.
Motivational speeches are something that should, well, motivate, which would require a great deal of effort and care into constructing it. Yours looks like you half-arsed it in five minutes and didn't bother to check for spelling errors either. And besides, what kind of a Caldari would listen to you when you are in a Gallente-aligned corporation?
Grahisha of ILF // Writer of Thoughts of a Clone Soldier // Latest entry published Mar. 18th
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Denak Kalamari
Intaki Liberation Front
Intaki Prosperity Initiative
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Posted - 2014.03.23 05:48:00 -
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Sergamon Draco wrote:Denak at the work again,baniel bj dont be mad.You have just get hit,by our "favorite" grammar teacher Denak Kalamari
The point of my reply was to point out how his motivational speech was lacking in many points, as was its writer's own credibility. His lack of effort in writing his post correctly was one of those points, as well written posts usually mean that you have taken care into the message it is conveying. I repeat my previous statement again, that baniel's post looks like he half-arsed it in five minutes without giving it much deeper thought at all. For clarification, I'll give you my thought process when I read that post:
Quote:All Caldari statesman? What's this? And who is baniel bj? Oh, it's those "Gallente are inferior let's crush them" things again.
Grammar's all over the place, random capital letters and line breaks, did he bother proofreading his post at all? Wait, what? He's with Namtar Elite? Well there went all his credibility.
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Oh, I'm being hated on by him. Lovely.
To summarize, from my first impression, baniel bj's post failed to do its task because:
A. Nobody has ever heard of baniel, and thus he has more to proof that he actually is loyal to the Caldari
B. His post indicates that he didn't give it much thought, implying that he didn't care much at all for the message his post was trying to convey
C. Pointing this out was replied with uncalled for hostility
D. He's fighting for the Gallente and trying to appeal to Caldari
As for your implications that I am a grammar police, I don't really care much how you type your words if you get your message across during normal communications. However, when you are trying to appeal to an authority or gain credibility among mercenaries, not taking care into writing your words properly seriously hurts your credibility and makes you look like an amateur.
Grahisha of ILF // Writer of Thoughts of a Clone Soldier // Latest entry published Mar. 22nd
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