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MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
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Posted - 2013.12.11 05:45:00 -
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All of us know of the day when the Amarr Empire attacked and enslaved the Minmitar, but few know of the Empire they found beyond them. After conquering the Minmitar, they continued past them searching the systems they came across looking for more to enslave. A few years after they conquered the Minmitar they came across a new Empire known as The Ender Empire.
The Ender Empire was only within a few systems but was highly advanced if not more then the Amarrians. The Amarr went on the attack immediately, starting with the edge of their territory. After surprising the first few planets The Ender Empire mobilized its full force. They were able to push the Amarrians back and easily held them off near their borders. The Anarrians were ashamed of what was going on and kept it classified as they continued t fight into the Ender Empire's territory. The war raged on until the Gallente and Caldari were discovered.
Then the Minmitar rebelled and pushed the Amarrians out regaining their freedom and made it even harder for the Amarr I reach The Ender Empire. Eventually the Gallente and Caldari learned of the new Empire and, curious, sent agents to learn more about them. The news was shocking, the Empire was developing shield and armor based technology superior to their own to use against the Amarr to push them away for good.
They immediately secretly began to aid the Amarr in conquering them in the hopes of stealing their technology. The Amarrians with the help of the Gallente and Caldari were able to push the Empire's forces back to their home system. After the disgrace of not crushing them, the Amarr Empire simply decided to eradicate them. They bombarded and invaded all of The Ender Empire's planets, killing anyone. After a year of purging, they left believing thy had succeeded. They were wrong many Enderians escaped and his amongst the Minmitar.
The Gallente and Caldari were unable to recover the technology not only due to the destruction brought to the planets cities, but due to the fact that the plans were hidden away with the survivors they do not know of.
To cover the story they claimed they had crushed a Minmitar rebellion their from some still enslaved their to ensure their humiliation stay unknown. Today that race still lives on and has come out of the shadows as the corporation Knights of Ender. They seek to rebuild their fallen empire and plan by starting the reconstruction of the Empire's elite army, Knights of Ender.
RP Break: I'll be posting another post about the Ender Empire itself.
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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True Adamance
Scions of Athra
4778
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Posted - 2013.12.11 20:41:00 -
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Another ....well unfortunately unbelievable section or lore. GIven that at the time of the first contact with the Minmatar the Amarr were confirmed to be the most power and technologically advanced (need dagger two on this) Empire around, it is highly unlikely that....your two system "Empire" could have done anything, let alone even made it to space.......
This God Modded Empire you have created is really bland.... could use some revision to make it more interesting and believable. Just my 0.02 ISK
"Shudder. Again another smart idea from an Amarr..."- Forlorn Destrier (11/12/13) LAWL
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Dagger-Two
Villore Joint Task Force
Villore Accords
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Posted - 2013.12.11 20:59:00 -
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The amarr were definitely at the forefront of technology during that period of time. The gallente were very close behind however, and overtook them in many fields rapidly over the next century. The Minmatar were space capable, had warp travel and had colonized quite a few systems, but were massively outnumbered by amarrian vessels, and quite technologically outmatched.
That being said, the amarr learned quick not to underestimate their guns too much. Turns out car-sized nuclear bombs being hurled through space at extremely high speeds are pretty effective. |
MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
52
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Posted - 2013.12.11 21:21:00 -
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True Adamance wrote: Another ....well unfortunately unbelievable section or lore. GIven that at the time of the first contact with the Minmatar the Amarr were confirmed to be the most power and technologically advanced (need dagger two on this) Empire around, it is highly unlikely that....your two system "Empire" could have done anything, let alone even made it to space.......
This God Modded Empire you have created is really bland.... could use some revision to make it more interesting and believable. Just my 0.02 ISK
Ya I know it's just something me and my buddies were messing around with for fun and add to it from time to time.
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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True Adamance
Scions of Athra
4780
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Posted - 2013.12.11 21:23:00 -
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Sorry I don't like coming in here and seemingly ragging on peoples hard work.... however New Eden doesn't have a big enough gap in lore to write in your own Empire sized super powers, nor does that fit in with the style of New Eden.
If you took the lore of the Scions of Athra, my current corp.
We styled the corp around a tradition of Athra familiies, extended to all of the Throne World during the reign of Emperor Heideran, where the lesser noble families would send their sons and daughters to fight on the frontlines of the Empires Imperial Guard. That's all they are, a noble tradition. The people in the group are nothing more and loyal men and women, all who happen to be skilled, but still nothing more special than normal humans/ immortals.
"Shudder. Again another smart idea from an Amarr..."- Forlorn Destrier (11/12/13) LAWL
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MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
52
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Posted - 2013.12.11 21:36:00 -
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Like I said me and my buddies are tweekig it as time goes to make it more sensible an realistic in he EVE universe. We are trying to make them like one of the many tribes, clans or races that the Amarr came across in space that were then enslaved but in this case were crushed for rebellion. We aren't original EVE players so we are still learning all of the original and non changing EVE story. If ya want feel free to provide links that are more helpful than the ones on the forum Dev post if they exist. We don't plan on mucking up the true EVE story :)
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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True Adamance
Scions of Athra
4783
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Posted - 2013.12.11 21:57:00 -
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MRBH1997 wrote:Like I said me and my buddies are tweekig it as time goes to make it more sensible an realistic in he EVE universe. We are trying to make them like one of the many tribes, clans or races that the Amarr came across in space that were then enslaved but in this case were crushed for rebellion. We aren't original EVE players so we are still learning all of the original and non changing EVE story. If ya want feel free to provide links that are more helpful than the ones on the forum Dev post if they exist. We don't plan on mucking up the true EVE story :)
Ah well then, if you are supposed to me a lost civilisation don't make your people overly good at any one thing,or everything, give them smaller, less notable talents, build them up as the people who in their hour of need rose to the occasion and though they resisted, died honourably fighting a vaster, superior foe.
"Shudder. Again another smart idea from an Amarr..."- Forlorn Destrier (11/12/13) LAWL
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MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
52
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Posted - 2013.12.11 22:22:00 -
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Ya that's what we are trying to do with the technology aspect if them. Also the size of the. We aren't clear on the whole systems and clusters and such so sorry of system was to big we are a little lacking in the knowledge I the order from planet to galaxy as I what is in between.
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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True Adamance
Scions of Athra
4787
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Posted - 2013.12.11 22:27:00 -
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MRBH1997 wrote:Ya that's what we are trying to do with the technology aspect if them. Also the size of the. We aren't clear on the whole systems and clusters and such so sorry of system was to big we are a little lacking in the knowledge I the order from planet to galaxy as I what is in between.
Systems are tiny (in the grand scheme of new eden) , a couple of planets at most....that would be nothing to an Empire like the Amarr who could flood the systems with hundreds of cruisers, Battleships, and several titans....
I could see your people being armed with projectile weapons like combat rifles...the issue is that if they had that level of tech why were they not on the galactic scene.... its a tough one to compose.....
"Shudder. Again another smart idea from an Amarr..."- Forlorn Destrier (11/12/13) LAWL
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MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
52
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Posted - 2013.12.12 00:34:00 -
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Also I have good grammar but when ever I use my phone it lags up when I type fast and auto correct likes to mess with me.
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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