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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
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Posted - 2015.05.29 03:16:00 -
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https://forums.dust514.com/default.aspx?g=posts&t=203948&find=unread
Here is the link to the Lore I wrote for the Power Core beginnings and why it came about. I already showed Aero Yassavi, and he loved it. I hope you, and everyone else, love it as well!
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True Adamance
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
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Posted - 2015.05.29 03:47:00 -
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Robert Conway wrote:GÇ£Gentlemen, please. Stand.GÇ¥
As the two rose, they saw the smiling face of Empress Jamyl Sarum staring at them. Behind her Kador Ouryon, otherwise known as True Adamance, walks out of the Imperial Chambers without his shirt on.
"Oh ****...." He said, sidling back into the bedroom offering the Empress a saucy wink. " See you in five Your Eminence."
GÇ£ Ahem..." She coughed, clearing her throat, visibly blushing. "I wanted to personally congratulate you two on your victory. IGÇÖve been watching you two when.... I..... when I've had time.GÇ¥
GÇ£Us? But why us?GÇ¥ asked Aero.
FTFY
Oh Aero is going to love this..... so ironic given the character adjustments he is making to Arston. Also for reference to improve the plot..... as I understand it Arston doesn't have a family. His younger brother, Eirki Yassavi, is MIA, their parents are gone, and he married his duty.
"Crush all who complain!"
- Arkena Wyrnspire
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Aero Yassavi
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
10
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Posted - 2015.05.29 03:56:00 -
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Still haven't decided if I'm changing my family loyalty. Main back story sticking. Regardless anyone loves being hand chosen by the Empress!
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares = PIE Inc, Amarr dedicated Corp
Channel for AFW Squads & Orbitals: PIE Ground Control
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
339
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:00:00 -
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True Adamance wrote: Robert Conway wrote:GÇ£Gentlemen, please. Stand.GÇ¥
As the two rose, they saw the smiling face of Empress Jamyl Sarum staring at them. Behind her Kador Ouryon, otherwise known as True Adamance, walks out of the Imperial Chambers without his shirt on.
"Oh ****...." He said, sidling back into the bedroom offering the Empress a saucy wink. " See you in five Your Eminence."
GÇ£ Ahem..." She coughed, clearing her throat, visibly blushing. "I wanted to personally congratulate you two on your victory. IGÇÖve been watching you two when.... I..... when I've had time.GÇ¥
GÇ£Us? But why us?GÇ¥ asked Aero.
FTFY Oh Aero is going to love this..... so ironic given the character adjustments he is making to Arston. Also for reference to improve the plot..... as I understand it Arston doesn't have a family. His younger brother, Eirki Yassavi, is MIA, their parents are gone, and he married his duty. For the Love of the Amarrian God.... You've turned my good story into a sex show! Gahhhh! Writers never get any respect around here...
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
339
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:03:00 -
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True Adamance wrote: Robert Conway wrote:GÇ£Gentlemen, please. Stand.GÇ¥
As the two rose, they saw the smiling face of Empress Jamyl Sarum staring at them. Behind her Kador Ouryon, otherwise known as True Adamance, walks out of the Imperial Chambers without his shirt on.
"Oh ****...." He said, sidling back into the bedroom offering the Empress a saucy wink. " See you in five Your Eminence."
GÇ£ Ahem..." She coughed, clearing her throat, visibly blushing. "I wanted to personally congratulate you two on your victory. IGÇÖve been watching you two when.... I..... when I've had time.GÇ¥
GÇ£Us? But why us?GÇ¥ asked Aero.
FTFY Oh Aero is going to love this..... so ironic given the character adjustments he is making to Arston. Also for reference to improve the plot..... as I understand it Arston doesn't have a family. His younger brother, Eirki Yassavi, is MIA, their parents are gone, and he married his duty. On a more serious note about Aero's back story, in that case I should probably flip around what Aero and Avallo say as their reasons for being loyal.
Idea for player driven marketing and videos
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Scheneighnay McBob
Tribal Liberation Force Paramilitary
7
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:05:00 -
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True Adamance wrote: Robert Conway wrote:GÇ£Gentlemen, please. Stand.GÇ¥
As the two rose, they saw the smiling face of Emperor Kador Ouryon, otherwise known as True Adamance staring at them. Behind him Scheneighnay McBob walks out of the Imperial Chambers without his shirt on.
"Oh ****...." He said, sidling back into the bedroom offering the Emperor a saucy wink. " See you in five Your Eminence."
GÇ£ Ahem..." He coughed, clearing his throat, visibly blushing. "I wanted to personally congratulate you two on your victory. IGÇÖve been watching you two when.... I..... when I've had time.GÇ¥
GÇ£Us? But why us?GÇ¥ asked Aero.
FTFY Oh Aero is going to love this..... so ironic given the character adjustments he is making to Arston. Also for reference to improve the plot..... as I understand it Arston doesn't have a family. His younger brother, Eirki Yassavi, is MIA, their parents are gone, and he married his duty.
FTFFY
Aloha snackbar
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Aero Yassavi
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
10
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:18:00 -
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Gist of Aero's back story
Born True Amarr, but poor parents Resented his parents status Stuck with parents out of duty while his brother ran away When parents died made a life for himself, moving up in status Highly religious and very much married to duty. Clean edge type of guy.
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares = PIE Inc, Amarr dedicated Corp
Channel for AFW Squads & Orbitals: PIE Ground Control
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
340
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:21:00 -
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Aero Yassavi wrote:Gist of Aero's back story
Born True Amarr, but poor parents Resented his parents status Stuck with parents out of duty while his brother ran away When parents died made a life for himself, moving up in status Highly religious and very much married to duty. Clean edge type of guy. So yes. I will switch what you and Avallo say.
It would make more sense for you to say what he said instead. Wish you would have told me that in your e-mail before I posted it..... -_- Haha
(Gê¬n+Ç-´)GèâGöüGÿån+ƒ.pâ+n+ín+ƒ. LASERS BTCH!!!!!!
The Incursions are back... and they're golden baby!
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True Adamance
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
19
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:37:00 -
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Robert Conway wrote:Aero Yassavi wrote:Gist of Aero's back story
Born True Amarr, but poor parents Resented his parents status Stuck with parents out of duty while his brother ran away When parents died made a life for himself, moving up in status Highly religious and very much married to duty. Clean edge type of guy. So yes. I will switch what you and Avallo say. It would make more sense for you to say what he said instead. Wish you would have told me that in your e-mail before I posted it..... -_- Haha Regardless I don't think this will end up being canon/lore.
I'm not sure your captured the Empress quite right. She speaks a little too directly for a pious, troubled young woman bearing the weight of the largest empire in New Eden suffering from the mental depredations of a Sleeper created AI hell bent on conquest.
"Crush all who complain!"
- Arkena Wyrnspire
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
340
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:39:00 -
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True Adamance wrote:Robert Conway wrote:Aero Yassavi wrote:Gist of Aero's back story
Born True Amarr, but poor parents Resented his parents status Stuck with parents out of duty while his brother ran away When parents died made a life for himself, moving up in status Highly religious and very much married to duty. Clean edge type of guy. So yes. I will switch what you and Avallo say. It would make more sense for you to say what he said instead. Wish you would have told me that in your e-mail before I posted it..... -_- Haha Regardless I don't think this will end up being canon/lore. Debby Downer over here... One can dream though.
Yassavi Approved. -Aero Yassavi
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True Adamance
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
19
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:40:00 -
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Robert Conway wrote:True Adamance wrote:Robert Conway wrote:Aero Yassavi wrote:Gist of Aero's back story
Born True Amarr, but poor parents Resented his parents status Stuck with parents out of duty while his brother ran away When parents died made a life for himself, moving up in status Highly religious and very much married to duty. Clean edge type of guy. So yes. I will switch what you and Avallo say. It would make more sense for you to say what he said instead. Wish you would have told me that in your e-mail before I posted it..... -_- Haha Regardless I don't think this will end up being canon/lore. Debby Downer over here... One can dream though. See above edit.
"Crush all who complain!"
- Arkena Wyrnspire
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
340
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:44:00 -
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True Adamance wrote:Robert Conway wrote:True Adamance wrote:Robert Conway wrote:Aero Yassavi wrote:Gist of Aero's back story
Born True Amarr, but poor parents Resented his parents status Stuck with parents out of duty while his brother ran away When parents died made a life for himself, moving up in status Highly religious and very much married to duty. Clean edge type of guy. So yes. I will switch what you and Avallo say. It would make more sense for you to say what he said instead. Wish you would have told me that in your e-mail before I posted it..... -_- Haha Regardless I don't think this will end up being canon/lore. Debby Downer over here... One can dream though. See above edit. redacted. It just didn't show up. Had to refresh page.
Yassavi Approved. -Aero Yassavi
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True Adamance
Praetoriani Classiarii Templares Praetoria Imperialis Excubitoris
19
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Posted - 2015.05.29 04:55:00 -
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Robert Conway wrote:Not trying to be rude, I might be blind, but what edit. :-/ I can't see it.
'I'm not sure your captured the Empress quite right. She speaks a little too directly for a pious, troubled young woman bearing the weight of the largest empire in New Eden suffering from the mental depredations of a Sleeper created AI hell bent on conquest.'
Have a look at these few quotes from the Chronicle 'All These Wayward Children'
"When someone cleared their throat, it raised the hairs on the back of his neck, and when he turned and saw who was standing in a darkened part of the room, he felt like his skin was going to tear itself off his body in fear."
and......
"I'm tired of speaking to no one but my retinue," she said, in a voice that felt like warm sunlight. "It is stifling. I want to reach out to others, particularly the isolated souls in the darker reaches. We mustn't ever fear the unknown." She leaned her head to one side. "Are you all right? You're gaping wider than a Slaver at feeding time."
and.......
"Her expression softened, and it was like the sun rising again.
"Do you think I'm beautiful?" she asked in a much milder tone.
"Yes, Highness," he replied without a moment's thought.
"Do you think I'm awesome?" she asked, every syllable of the word clicking smoothly into place.
"Yes, Highness," he replied again.
"Do you think I'm terrifying?" she asked, as if they were all the same questions."
Jamyl Sarum is written as a particular kind of woman with the mannerisms of a polite, young Amarrian woman that is afflicted by a constant unfathomable sense of spiritual dissonance. She was a girl who idealistically dreamed of being the Empress one day however after undergoing the trials of becoming the Empires she now looks atthe Faith as a pragmatic solution to controlling power within her empire.
At the same time she has this aura that most people simply cannot understand and that is both awe inspiring and terrifying at the same time.
When the authors write her her manner of speech always seems to imply something more that what she is saying on the surface, and it usually pertains to spiritual matters rather than mundane things like military conquest as if she is already self assured that victory is inevitable, or at least defeat is impossible.
"Crush all who complain!"
- Arkena Wyrnspire
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
341
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Posted - 2015.05.29 05:01:00 -
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True Adamance wrote:Robert Conway wrote:Not trying to be rude, I might be blind, but what edit. :-/ I can't see it. 'I'm not sure your captured the Empress quite right. She speaks a little too directly for a pious, troubled young woman bearing the weight of the largest empire in New Eden suffering from the mental depredations of a Sleeper created AI hell bent on conquest.' Have a look at these few quotes from the Chronicle 'All These Wayward Children' "When someone cleared their throat, it raised the hairs on the back of his neck, and when he turned and saw who was standing in a darkened part of the room, he felt like his skin was going to tear itself off his body in fear."and...... "I'm tired of speaking to no one but my retinue," she said, in a voice that felt like warm sunlight. "It is stifling. I want to reach out to others, particularly the isolated souls in the darker reaches. We mustn't ever fear the unknown." She leaned her head to one side. "Are you all right? You're gaping wider than a Slaver at feeding time."and....... "Her expression softened, and it was like the sun rising again.
"Do you think I'm beautiful?" she asked in a much milder tone.
"Yes, Highness," he replied without a moment's thought.
"Do you think I'm awesome?" she asked, every syllable of the word clicking smoothly into place.
"Yes, Highness," he replied again.
"Do you think I'm terrifying?" she asked, as if they were all the same questions."Jamyl Sarum is written as a particular kind of woman with the mannerisms of a polite, young Amarrian woman that is afflicted by a constant unfathomable sense of spiritual dissonance. She was a girl who idealistically dreamed of being the Empress one day however after undergoing the trials of becoming the Empires she now looks atthe Faith as a pragmatic solution to controlling power within her empire. At the same time she has this aura that most people simply cannot understand and that is both awe inspiring and terrifying at the same time. When the authors write her her manner of speech always seems to imply something more that what she is saying on the surface, and it usually pertains to spiritual matters rather than mundane things like military conquest as if she is already self assured that victory is inevitable, or at least defeat is impossible. Think of how disturbing it would be talking to the most stunningly beautiful woman you have ever met whom you know is the master of trillions of souls including yourself, who speaks of concepts you simply cannot begin to understand is a pleasant tone as if it were nothing but generic conversation, and at the same time could have you flayed alive several times over if you displease her even slightly. Hmm... Will have to think about this.
Yassavi Approved. -Aero Yassavi
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
357
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Posted - 2015.06.01 03:42:00 -
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Please feel free to give any revisions to the attitude of Jamly Sarum, as I'm not the greatest with lore and writing, I most likely made a few errors.
Yassavi Approved. -Aero Yassavi
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Joel II X
Bacon with a bottle of Quafe
7
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Posted - 2015.06.01 04:54:00 -
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Then, the cores arrived to New Eden, along with the Companion Cube.
I just hope GLaDOS isn't part of the mysterious sleepers. |
Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
358
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Posted - 2015.06.01 05:06:00 -
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Joel II X wrote:Then, the cores arrived to New Eden, along with the Companion Cube.
I just hope GLaDOS isn't part of the mysterious sleepers. Companion Cube? Ya lost me. Lol.
Yassavi Approved. -Aero Yassavi
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MINA Longstrike
Kirjuun Heiian
3
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Posted - 2015.06.01 05:12:00 -
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I claim to be responsible for integration of conventional datacore technology into the powercores CPU aspects, allowing for callup functions of the most optimal warfare strategies present in each individual races dropsuit design.
So independently integrated into each (for example) caldari sentinel dropsuit, is the sum of all caldari knowledge of defensive and offensive military strategies involving the sentinel, knowledge of how weaponry affects the sentinel, and how the sentinels onboard computer and powersupply interacts with and optimizes for various heavy weapons.
Hnolai ki tuul, ti sei oni a tiu. Kirjuun Heiian.
I have a few alts.
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Robert Conway
Concordiat Mercenaries
358
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Posted - 2015.06.01 05:17:00 -
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MINA Longstrike wrote:I claim to be responsible for integration of conventional datacore technology into the powercores CPU aspects, allowing for callup functions of the most optimal warfare strategies present in each individual races dropsuit design.
So independently integrated into each (for example) caldari sentinel dropsuit, is the sum of all caldari knowledge of defensive and offensive military strategies involving the sentinel, knowledge of how weaponry affects the sentinel, and how the sentinels onboard computer and powersupply interacts with and optimizes for various heavy weapons. So you're saying you want me to write a story based on you with this stuff?
Yassavi Approved. -Aero Yassavi
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