Interesting prologue but I have a tough time capturing and or creating an image of what the story is about.

Sure its a nice concept to tackle BIG questions like "who am I?", "What am I?", "Why do I fight?"......however it doesn't make for good reading as we as amateurs rare ever are able to convey through writing exactly the answer.

Personally unless you without a doubt and wholly understand your character and what makes them who they are, right down to their core, and admittedly its not easy to admit you don't, you won't be able to answer of convey those concepts well.
I also think I will have a tough time figuring out the premise of the plot since you have hot introduced a person for me to attach myself to.

All in all I applaud what I think you are trying to do.....but would caution you against it.

"Who am I ?" Plots are hard to narrate and very tricky to get right.

Frankly speaking I would rather hear about your character directly than an internal monologue about who and what your character thinks he or she it.

I would read this story
I never gave a second thought about the effects of cloning on the individual, this interest me and would love to read other people idea on what happens.

Realization that the mercs we kill off aren't us but people inside the game that have there own thoughts and feels but we just control them and have somebody to write down the merc perspective is captivating

Edit: just realized my signature mentions a Minmitar