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MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
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Posted - 2013.12.11 06:06:00 -
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After the great collapse, many were stranded on the planets they resided on and few reached for the stars again. Few became great civilizations and many were cut down before they could become great. One of these races is The Ender Empire.
The Ender Empire itself was based off a mix of Feudalism and Democracy. The leader was the King and his governors were lords and many other ranks and ideas on leadership were based off of feudalism. But the people were Citizens and had free will under the democracy part of the government as well as the Free Market Economy. The people were able to vote families into or out of power for roles like lord and so forth. If the people wished it, they could vote to have the King find new candidates for a lordship and remove the old lord. Families still in ownership of lordship could hold on t it for centuries. The King though always stayed one family and never changed.
The Ender Empire became very innovative over the centuries and eventually returned to the stars colonizing 2 other systems. They stopped expanding then and worked towards improving their new systems. They focused on the infrastructure, living conditions, and the economies.
After the developing problem of disease heightened, they looked towards technology to cure it. They made huge advancements in nanotechnology and cybernetics. They used these advancements I improve the general physical and mental abilities of all citizens and it made them very noticeable.
They developed red eyes that seemed to have a light glow to them and had improved physical abilities and became walking computers in intelligence. It was almost impossible for you to find one of their race that was not muscular.
They also worked a little with nova technology and created a powerful Nova Sword which fit in well with their life style of feudalism. Even the uniforms and armor of their troops looked like futuristic knights. They did little in military research and development and were lucky for their implants because without them they would've never been able to create the military technology needed to hold off the Amarr Empire when they came to attack.
RP Break: this post gives you a better idea of the people of the Ender Empire and how their government worked.
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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Denak Kalamari
Intaki Liberation Front
Intaki Prosperity Initiative
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Posted - 2013.12.11 09:44:00 -
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I'll cut you in before you continue further.
I'll just have to say that the background story for your empire is the most god-modding and Mary Sue I've seen in a long time. Better than all the empires, superior intelligence and technology and all that other bullcrap. Incorporating yourself in the official New Eden story line like that is also very much god-modding on top of your superior in-pretty-much-everything-except-military description. And finally, the only time the four empires have ever worked together in any occasion was with the formation of CONCORD, and fending off Sansha's Nation, these are extraordinary circumstances and adding one more as part of your own corporation's(assuming this is about your own corporation, reading the name) history is not a good idea.
Grahisha of ILF // Writer of Thoughts of a Clone Soldier // Latest entry published 05/12/13
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Dagger-Two
Villore Joint Task Force
Villore Accords
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Posted - 2013.12.11 19:15:00 -
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Yeah, lots of mary-sue-ness |
MRBH1997
Knights Of Ender
Public Disorder.
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Posted - 2013.12.11 21:30:00 -
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Denak Kalamari wrote:I'll cut you in before you continue further.
I'll just have to say that the background story for your empire is the most god-modding and Mary Sue I've seen in a long time. Better than all the empires, superior intelligence and technology and all that other bullcrap. Incorporating yourself in the official New Eden story line like that is also very much god-modding on top of your superior in-pretty-much-everything-except-military description. And finally, the only time the four empires have ever worked together in any occasion was with the formation of CONCORD, and fending off Sansha's Nation, these are extraordinary circumstances and adding one more as part of your own corporation's(assuming this is about your own corporation, reading the name) history is not a good idea.
Didn't claim them to be superior actually and if I implemented that in their that was a mistake for I was tired when I posted it. The only advancements they excelled in was nano circuitry and cybernetics. They only went to further develop and improve on Gallente armor and Caldari shield in the sake of pushing the Amarr back because they were sarting to lose ground. I may have forgotten that paragraph so my bad. Also all fan fiction is related to EVE and I made no change to what actually happened in it, like all fan fiction I made something new. Also I don't mean I me and some buddies came up with this for fun about our corporation. Whether you care about or not is your problem not ours, if we wanna come up with fan fiction of our own then we will for the heck of it.
CEO of Knights of Ender, Pro Jack of All Traits
Corporation Website: http://koe.shivtr.com
Skype: MRBH1997
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