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Mistaahh Juvenile
Synergy United
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Posted - 2013.08.06 17:44:00 -
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Disclaimer: Do you want to be part of this, the story? And have your name immortalised on the DUST 514 forums? Join Synergy United: https://forums.dust514.com/default.aspx?g=posts&t=96256&find=unread
Prologue: Dropship down
"Hold on, Mist! Don't let go!" Mist gritted his teeth, as he tried to hold on to the mount of the blaster, wich already was shot off. "Stell! Put this thing down!" Was the last thing Mike yelled at him, the dropship started to lose altitude, at a rate that was too fast to be good. Mike groaned frustrated, and pulled Mist back in the dropship. "Alright Mist we be doin' this ****! Stell, prepare to jump!" Stell nodded, and put on the autopilot, giving them a few valuable seconds. Mike jumped out, and Mist looked briefly at him. Stell jumped out of the cockpit, and Mist saw him activating his inertia dampener. He was about to jump, wjen the engine exploded, the blow smacked him in the cockpit. The ship was crashing, gaining more speed and speed, down towards the ground. Mike saw the dropship, and knew that Mist was still in there, and started screaming his lungs out. "Mist! Get out! It's going to blow! Mii-" The rest of his words got lost in the deafening sound of the other engine exploding, triggering the fuel tank into an explosion. Stell shaked his head and grabbed Mike's shoulder. "Mist is gone, man, nothing we can do now." He pushed Stell of "**** that, we're going to get him, now!" Mike started walking, but suddenly dropped down dead, there followed a gunshot. Stell sweared, and looked around for cover, his brain was working at an incredible field. He saw no cover nowhere. He knew this was his end aswell. He sighed, and threw whoever was watching the finger, before also dropping to the ground, dead.
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Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.06 17:46:00 -
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Reserved for more story. |
Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.06 17:48:00 -
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Reserved for more story. |
Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.06 17:49:00 -
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Reserved for more story.
Feel free to criticise, I'm quite new to writing fiction, I've written before, but I can always do better.
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Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.06 23:19:00 -
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U-u-updatef |
Mistaahh Juvenile
Synergy United
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Posted - 2013.08.18 17:49:00 -
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And another update.
And this one's reserved. |
Mistaahh Juvenile
Synergy United
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Posted - 2013.08.18 17:50:00 -
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Reserved, going with bumps as reserves xD |
Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.19 20:38:00 -
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Updated. |
Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.21 20:42:00 -
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Updated the story, almost catched up with current time..
Also, please criticise, I'm stumbling in the dark wether it is good or bad. |
Temba Fusrodah
Ganksters Inc
Drake Ashigaru
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Posted - 2013.08.24 16:22:00 -
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I read the first 2.5 installments of your story, it was interesting, however your butchering of English grammar makes it hard to stomach.
If you are not a native English speaker I understand, if you are a native English speaker then writing is a discipline you have not yet mastered.
I encourage you to keep at it, the creative storytelling urge is something that can not be taught, you have that, everything else can be learned.
Don't give up on writing, just work harder to be better at it! |
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Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.08.24 16:49:00 -
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Belgium, dutch is my native language, dutch and english grammaf are different
Thanks for the tip though.. |
Temba Fusrodah
Ganksters Inc
Drake Ashigaru
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Posted - 2013.08.24 17:44:00 -
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Mistaahh Juvenile wrote:Belgium, dutch is my native language, dutch and english grammaf are different
Thanks for the tip though..
Your English is certainly far better then my Dutch so I salute you sir! I'm going back to finish reading your story now. Thank you for the response. |
Mistaahh Juvenile
Synergy United
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Posted - 2013.09.13 20:51:00 -
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Finished chapter 3, starting 4 now. |
steady rikia
Sebiestor Field Sappers
Minmatar Republic
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Posted - 2013.09.13 22:02:00 -
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will give it a read tomorrow, while hope to raise my own group i hope a common alliance can be found between our groups :D and combined story would make good reading for future EvE fans :D |
Mistaahh Juvenile
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Posted - 2013.09.13 22:30:00 -
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A collab would be nice, however, Mist enjoys the title 'Independant TaskForce' and won't make alliances to political involved parties, he'll fight for them if they show ISK..
However, if the field sappers are neutral and not pollitically involved, wich I doubt, he will seal an alliance.
However, Mist likes Steady, so if Steady's a requesting party you'll get serviced quicker and with a higher priority. |
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